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Q&A: What do you think about an inspirational speaker such as Anthony Robbins?

Question by Ninja_Bass: What do you think about an inspirational speaker such as Anthony Robbins

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Answer by brett_otte
i think he sucks

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Play Me, I’m Yours, Day 6 – Jun 30, 2010 – 48
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On the 6th day of the "Play Me, I’m Yours" project, I tackled the borough of Brooklyn — starting at the Brooklyn Bridge Park, down at the edge of the East River, looking across to the southern tip of Manhattan — and the Statue of Liberty in the background. I spent some time watching an aspiring young concert pianist named Andrew Mancilla playing some tunes, before the piano was taken over by a couple of young children

From there, I hiked back up the hill to Boro Hall and Cadman Plaza, where I found my second piano; and then a couple blocks east to Willoughby Plaza (just a couple blocks away from the old Brooklyn Polytechnic Institute, now renamed New York Polytechnic) for piano #3. Andrew Mancilla appeared again, and I listened to his music for a while…

Then, being woefully ignorant of the bus/subway system in Brooklyn, I took a gypsy cab to Ft. Greene Park, where I found one piano in the entrance to the park, and another one at the top of the hill where the Visitor’s Center sits.

From there, it was on to Grand Army Plaza, where I found a piano tucked away at the edge of the massive monument that mimics the Arc de Triomphe in Paris. I then walked several blocks down Flatbush Avenue, past the Brooklyn Zoo, to find the carousel, where another piano sat by its lonely self, ignored by everyone.

The next stop was the Herber Von King Park, somewhere in the middle of the borough, where I found a vandalized piano sitting at the base of of an outdoor theater for community affairs; one of the stage hands was busy painting some sets for a play, and shrugged when I asked her who had done the damage.

Next came McCarren Park, up in the Williamsburg area of Brooklyn, where I found a bright yellow piano being played energetically by a pierced and tattooed young woman who spoke little or no English when I asked her a few questions. Her place was then taken over by a couple of local fellows, one of whom brought along some bongo drums to accompany his pianist friend.

After a quick lunch in a bar at the corner of the park (which included the biggest, tastiest, and most filling BLT sandwich I have ever had), I took a taxi down to Coney Island and walked out on the boardwalk to find my final piano. A man by the name of John Rotante was playing a number of popular tunes; he told me that he sells Volvos by day, and plays the piano by night. If you want to hire him, his email address is pianostylist@aol.com and his website is www.pianostylist.com.

When it was all over, I trudged over to the subway stop at Stillwell Avenue, and took the long ride back into Manhattan on the F train. All in all, it was a day well spent…

*****************************************

A few years ago, a British artist by the name of Luke Jerram came up with the intriguing idea of spreading pianos around the city, with an open invitation for anyone nearby to wander up and begin playing something. Anything. First it was London, and now it’s here in New York City.

Starting on June 21st, sixty pianos have been donated, painted, and "installed" throughout the five boroughs of New York; you can see the locations here. I managed to visit seven of the pianos on the first day, and another seven on the second day. The program will only be running for two weeks, and I’ll be out of town for at least a few of those days … so it won’t be easy, but my goal is to track down, visit, and photograph all 60 pianos by the time it’s over. Even the one at the Staten Island Zoo, and the one located somewhere in the Joyce Kilmer Park up in the Bronx.

Aside from the logistics of getting to these remote corners of the five boroughs, it sounds like a straightforward task: ride a subway train to the appropriate stop, walk a block or two, take photograph or two, and then go back where you came from.

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But it’s turning out to be a little more difficult than I had thought, partly because the maps provided on the Web site are somewhat ambiguous and imprecise, and partly because the officials (e.g., guards, cops, grounds-keepers, etc.) whom you would expect to know about such things have been remarkably clueless.

I’ve also been hearing rumors that some of the pianos are being moved around between one day and the next. That might explain why I had to abandon today’s plan to photograph the piano in Bryant Park: after circling the park and the adjoining New York Public Library a couple of times, I concluded they had either hidden the piano, or moved into a subterranean cell.

As for the pianos I’ve found, the experiences have been quite varied. Some of the pianos sit mute and abandoned — including, oddly enough, the very fist piano in Times Square, which had been plunked down at Seventh Avenue and 44th Street, and basically ignored by everyone. The same was true of one of the pianos situated in a hard-to-find corner of Lincoln Center, as well as a piano ostensibly located at the Metropolitan Museum of Art — which turned out to be sitting next to the giant obelisk behind the museum, and on the far side of the inner park roadway.

As for the pianos that do attract some musicians: it’s quite a varied bunch. Some are casual amateurs, some of whom have no idea what the program is all about, and who had no advance warning that the pianos would even be there. Some have obviously been planning and practicing for months. Some of the musicians sing, some don’t; some bring along drummers, guitarists, and vocalists. I even heard that one musician brought some dancers to help liven up his performance, but I haven’t seen that myself…

Anyway, I’ll keep photographing the pianos, and uploading the best of the photographs, until I run out of pianos, run out of time, or run out of energy — whichever happens first.

Play Me, I’m Yours, Day 6 – Jun 30, 2010 – 50
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Image by Ed Yourdon

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On the 6th day of the "Play Me, I’m Yours" project, I tackled the borough of Brooklyn — starting at the Brooklyn Bridge Park, down at the edge of the East River, looking across to the southern tip of Manhattan — and the Statue of Liberty in the background. I spent some time watching an aspiring young concert pianist named Andrew Mancilla playing some tunes, before the piano was taken over by a couple of young children

From there, I hiked back up the hill to Boro Hall and Cadman Plaza, where I found my second piano; and then a couple blocks east to Willoughby Plaza (just a couple blocks away from the old Brooklyn Polytechnic Institute, now renamed New York Polytechnic) for piano #3. Andrew Mancilla appeared again, and I listened to his music for a while…

Then, being woefully ignorant of the bus/subway system in Brooklyn, I took a gypsy cab to Ft. Greene Park, where I found one piano in the entrance to the park, and another one at the top of the hill where the Visitor’s Center sits.

From there, it was on to Grand Army Plaza, where I found a piano tucked away at the edge of the massive monument that mimics the Arc de Triomphe in Paris. I then walked several blocks down Flatbush Avenue, past the Brooklyn Zoo, to find the carousel, where another piano sat by its lonely self, ignored by everyone.

The next stop was the Herber Von King Park, somewhere in the middle of the borough, where I found a vandalized piano sitting at the base of of an outdoor theater for community affairs; one of the stage hands was busy painting some sets for a play, and shrugged when I asked her who had done the damage.

Next came McCarren Park, up in the Williamsburg area of Brooklyn, where I found a bright yellow piano being played energetically by a pierced and tattooed young woman who spoke little or no English when I asked her a few questions. Her place was then taken over by a couple of local fellows, one of whom brought along some bongo drums to accompany his pianist friend.

After a quick lunch in a bar at the corner of the park (which included the biggest, tastiest, and most filling BLT sandwich I have ever had), I took a taxi down to Coney Island and walked out on the boardwalk to find my final piano. A man by the name of John Rotante was playing a number of popular tunes; he told me that he sells Volvos by day, and plays the piano by night. If you want to hire him, his email address is pianostylist@aol.com and his website is www.pianostylist.com.

When it was all over, I trudged over to the subway stop at Stillwell Avenue, and took the long ride back into Manhattan on the F train. All in all, it was a day well spent…

*****************************************

A few years ago, a British artist by the name of Luke Jerram came up with the intriguing idea of spreading pianos around the city, with an open invitation for anyone nearby to wander up and begin playing something. Anything. First it was London, and now it’s here in New York City.

Starting on June 21st, sixty pianos have been donated, painted, and "installed" throughout the five boroughs of New York; you can see the locations here. I managed to visit seven of the pianos on the first day, and another seven on the second day. The program will only be running for two weeks, and I’ll be out of town for at least a few of those days … so it won’t be easy, but my goal is to track down, visit, and photograph all 60 pianos by the time it’s over. Even the one at the Staten Island Zoo, and the one located somewhere in the Joyce Kilmer Park up in the Bronx.

Aside from the logistics of getting to these remote corners of the five boroughs, it sounds like a straightforward task: ride a subway train to the appropriate stop, walk a block or two, take photograph or two, and then go back where you came from. But it’s turning out to be a little more difficult than I had thought, partly because the maps provided on the Web site are somewhat ambiguous and imprecise, and partly because the officials (e.g., guards, cops, grounds-keepers, etc.) whom you would expect to know about such things have been remarkably clueless.

I’ve also been hearing rumors that some of the pianos are being moved around between one day and the next. That might explain why I had to abandon today’s plan to photograph the piano in Bryant Park: after circling the park and the adjoining New York Public Library a couple of times, I concluded they had either hidden the piano, or moved into a subterranean cell.

As for the pianos I’ve found, the experiences have been quite varied. Some of the pianos sit mute and abandoned — including, oddly enough, the very fist piano in Times Square, which had been plunked down at Seventh Avenue and 44th Street, and basically ignored by everyone. The same was true of one of the pianos situated in a hard-to-find corner of Lincoln Center, as well as a piano ostensibly located at the Metropolitan Museum of Art — which turned out to be sitting next to the giant obelisk behind the museum, and on the far side of the inner park roadway.

As for the pianos that do attract some musicians: it’s quite a varied bunch. Some are casual amateurs, some of whom have no idea what the program is all about, and who had no advance warning that the pianos would even be there. Some have obviously been planning and practicing for months. Some of the musicians sing, some don’t; some bring along drummers, guitarists, and vocalists. I even heard that one musician brought some dancers to help liven up his performance, but I haven’t seen that myself…

Anyway, I’ll keep photographing the pianos, and uploading the best of the photographs, until I run out of pianos, run out of time, or run out of energy — whichever happens first.

Play Me, I’m Yours, Day 6 – Jun 30, 2010 – 49
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Image by Ed Yourdon

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On the 6th day of the "Play Me, I’m Yours" project, I tackled the borough of Brooklyn — starting at the Brooklyn Bridge Park, down at the edge of the East River, looking across to the southern tip of Manhattan — and the Statue of Liberty in the background. I spent some time watching an aspiring young concert pianist named Andrew Mancilla playing some tunes, before the piano was taken over by a couple of young children

From there, I hiked back up the hill to Boro Hall and Cadman Plaza, where I found my second piano; and then a couple blocks east to Willoughby Plaza (just a couple blocks away from the old Brooklyn Polytechnic Institute, now renamed New York Polytechnic) for piano #3. Andrew Mancilla appeared again, and I listened to his music for a while…

Then, being woefully ignorant of the bus/subway system in Brooklyn, I took a gypsy cab to Ft. Greene Park, where I found one piano in the entrance to the park, and another one at the top of the hill where the Visitor’s Center sits.

From there, it was on to Grand Army Plaza, where I found a piano tucked away at the edge of the massive monument that mimics the Arc de Triomphe in Paris. I then walked several blocks down Flatbush Avenue, past the Brooklyn Zoo, to find the carousel, where another piano sat by its lonely self, ignored by everyone.

The next stop was the Herber Von King Park, somewhere in the middle of the borough, where I found a vandalized piano sitting at the base of of an outdoor theater for community affairs; one of the stage hands was busy painting some sets for a play, and shrugged when I asked her who had done the damage.

Next came McCarren Park, up in the Williamsburg area of Brooklyn, where I found a bright yellow piano being played energetically by a pierced and tattooed young woman who spoke little or no English when I asked her a few questions. Her place was then taken over by a couple of local fellows, one of whom brought along some bongo drums to accompany his pianist friend.

After a quick lunch in a bar at the corner of the park (which included the biggest, tastiest, and most filling BLT sandwich I have ever had), I took a taxi down to Coney Island and walked out on the boardwalk to find my final piano. A man by the name of John Rotante was playing a number of popular tunes; he told me that he sells Volvos by day, and plays the piano by night. If you want to hire him, his email address is pianostylist@aol.com and his website is www.pianostylist.com.

When it was all over, I trudged over to the subway stop at Stillwell Avenue, and took the long ride back into Manhattan on the F train. All in all, it was a day well spent…

*****************************************

A few years ago, a British artist by the name of Luke Jerram came up with the intriguing idea of spreading pianos around the city, with an open invitation for anyone nearby to wander up and begin playing something. Anything. First it was London, and now it’s here in New York City.

Starting on June 21st, sixty pianos have been donated, painted, and "installed" throughout the five boroughs of New York; you can see the locations here. I managed to visit seven of the pianos on the first day, and another seven on the second day. The program will only be running for two weeks, and I’ll be out of town for at least a few of those days … so it won’t be easy, but my goal is to track down, visit, and photograph all 60 pianos by the time it’s over. Even the one at the Staten Island Zoo, and the one located somewhere in the Joyce Kilmer Park up in the Bronx.

Aside from the logistics of getting to these remote corners of the five boroughs, it sounds like a straightforward task: ride a subway train to the appropriate stop, walk a block or two, take photograph or two, and then go back where you came from. But it’s turning out to be a little more difficult than I had thought, partly because the maps provided on the Web site are somewhat ambiguous and imprecise, and partly because the officials (e.g., guards, cops, grounds-keepers, etc.) whom you would expect to know about such things have been remarkably clueless.

I’ve also been hearing rumors that some of the pianos are being moved around between one day and the next. That might explain why I had to abandon today’s plan to photograph the piano in Bryant Park: after circling the park and the adjoining New York Public Library a couple of times, I concluded they had either hidden the piano, or moved into a subterranean cell.

As for the pianos I’ve found, the experiences have been quite varied. Some of the pianos sit mute and abandoned — including, oddly enough, the very fist piano in Times Square, which had been plunked down at Seventh Avenue and 44th Street, and basically ignored by everyone. The same was true of one of the pianos situated in a hard-to-find corner of Lincoln Center, as well as a piano ostensibly located at the Metropolitan Museum of Art — which turned out to be sitting next to the giant obelisk behind the museum, and on the far side of the inner park roadway.

As for the pianos that do attract some musicians: it’s quite a varied bunch. Some are casual amateurs, some of whom have no idea what the program is all about, and who had no advance warning that the pianos would even be there. Some have obviously been planning and practicing for months. Some of the musicians sing, some don’t; some bring along drummers, guitarists, and vocalists. I even heard that one musician brought some dancers to help liven up his performance, but I haven’t seen that myself…

Anyway, I’ll keep photographing the pianos, and uploading the best of the photographs, until I run out of pianos, run out of time, or run out of energy — whichever happens first.


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Please help me in the following questions!!!! thank you very much!!! thx thx thx?

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by Michigan Municipal League (MML)

Question by James L: Please help me in the following questions!!!! thank you very much!!! thx thx thx?
1. Select the sentence written in passive voice.

a. The book was written by the technical writer.
b. Columbus discovered America.
c. The boat sailed through the harbor.
d. Marty’s sister ran the race.

2. Select the sentence written in active voice.

a. The picture was framed by the framing store.
b. Chaya’s diaper was changed before we left to go to the movies.
c. Because I was in a hurry, I accidentally knocked the lamp off of the table.
d. The paper was blown away by a breeze.

3. Is the following sentence written in active or passive voice?

“The request was denied”

a. active
b. passive

4. Which word in the following sentence is a nominalization?

Despite conflicting poll results, the president’s rejection of the bill was expected.

a. despite
b. conflicting
c. rejection
d. expected

5. Select the sentence that contains the stronger verb.

a. The report deals with the construction of the judicial system.
b. The report analyzes the construction of the judicial system.

6. Select the sentence that contains the stronger verb.

a. Kate burns a lot of calories when she runs.
b. Kate uses a lot of calories when she runs.

7. Select the sentence that contains the stronger verb.

a. John went to work this morning.
b. John drove to work this morning.

For questions 8–10, use the following introduction to a case study to answer the following questions.

Introduction

With the growing dependence on the World Wide Web, more and more individuals are welcoming the utilization of this recent technology to further advance the world of education. Distance learning and online education are becoming essential to the available course options offered by institutions of higher learning.

This paper examines the efficacy of this matter as a collection of genres. Specifically, I will draw on my own experience in two similar courses—one taught in a traditional face-to-face classroom, and the other taught online. The two courses, “Designing Brochures and Newsletters” and “Designing Instruction Manuals,” were both taught by the same instructor and used similar texts and resources. Essentially, the main differences between these courses were the media through which they were presented and the different instruction genres that were utilized.

The first section of this paper will give an explanation of the format of each of the classrooms as well as their similarities and differences. In the second section, I will examine how the different genres used affected course presentation and student success. Finally, I will illustrate how online learning can be most effective; specifically, I will examine my own experience and assess what tools instructors can use to promote increased student learning.

8. Which of the following sentences from the above passage includes a nominalization?

a. Distance learning and online education are becoming essential to the available course options offered by institutions of higher learning.
b. This paper examines the efficacy of online education as a collection of genres.
c. The two courses, “Designing Brochures and Newsletters” and “Designing Instruction Manuals” were both taught by the same instructor and used similar texts and resources.
d. The first section of this paper will give an explanation of the format of each of the classrooms, as well as their similarities and differences.

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9. Based on what you have learned in this lesson, which of the following changes need to be made to this sentence from the above selection?

This paper examines the efficacy of the area as a collection of genres.

a. The verb “examines” needs to be replaced with an action verb.
b. The words “the area” need to be replaced with a specific noun/word.
c. The sentence needs to be modified so it is politically correct.

10. Which of the following sentences is written in passive voice?

a. With the growing dependence on the World Wide Web, more and more individuals are welcoming the utilization of this recent technology to further advance the world of education.
b. This paper examines the efficacy of this matter as a collection of genres.
c. The two courses, “Designing Brochures and Newsletters” and “Designing Instruction Manuals” were both taught by the same instructor and used similar texts and resources.
d. Finally, I will illustrate how online learning can be most effective; specifically, I will examine my own experience and assess what tools instructors can use to promote increased student learning.

11. According to this lesson, the most complex and impressive words should be used in technical documents.

a. true
b. false

12. The following sentence is politically correct.

The Hispanic firefighter saved the little girl.

a. true
b. false

13. The following sentence is politically correct.

The police officer responded to the call.

a. true
b. false

14. The following sentence is an excellent example of how you should

Best answer:

Answer by Will H
http://legacy.lclark.edu/~writing/handouts/Active%20Voice.pdf

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FREEDOM FROM PHOBIA IN PUBLIC SPEAKING: TIPS AND TECHNIQUES OVERCOMING FEAR AND PHOBIA OF PUBLIC SPEAKING

FREEDOM FROM PHOBIA IN PUBLIC SPEAKING: TIPS AND TECHNIQUES OVERCOMING FEAR AND PHOBIA OF PUBLIC SPEAKING

Some approach public speaking like a type of internal thrill ride while others are choked silent at the very thought of giving a speech. Overcoming the fear of speaking in public is a subject of great interest to many. This activity is rated among the most frightening events in a person’s life. Some have gone as far as rating the fear of public speaking higher than the fear of death.

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Stolen Camera Phone Becomes a Blog Sensation

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Stolen Camera Phone Becomes a Blog Sensation
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WashingtonPost.com Does a Good Job of Linking Both Ways
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The Washington Post makes it easy for bloggers to link to their content, then rewards them for doing so by displaying links (provided by Technorati) back to them.

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The method seems to have paid off with the Washington Post reporting that they receive more than 1/3 of referrals from blogs: www.buzzmachine.com/2006/05/24/opinions-about-opinions/

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What are the best techniques to deliver a Lecture or Presentation?

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Question by nawaz: What are the best techniques to deliver a Lecture or Presentation?

Best answer:

Answer by seventyhemichallenger
Mostly, the best technique is dependent upon the audience, and how they learn; some people learn by rote, some by hands on, some people need to have background noise, some need quiet.
You need to identify your group and then research their particular learning style.

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What percentage of professional actors laugh due to stage fright?

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Question by thebostonredhead: What percentage of professional actors laugh due to stage fright?
I’ve always wondered how much stage fright causes a professional actor to get a case of the giggles.

Best answer:

Answer by oncameratalent
Symptoms of stage fright include:

* A general feeling of anxiety before, or during, the beginning of a speech or presentation.
* Cold hands, sweating hands, or shaky hands.
* Dry mouth.
* Fast pulse.
* Nausea.
* Rapid Breathing
* Shaky knees.
* Tight throat.
* Trembling lips.

Laughing usually occurs when they flub their lines or stumble, etc. and is not a symptom of stage fright.

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What is my IELTS score?

Question by paul: What is my IELTS score?
Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no specialist
knowledge of the following topic.

Television has brought great changes to the way many children spend leisure
time. While some of these changes have been beneficial, others have had a harmful effect.

To what extent do you disagree or disagree?

(Use your own ideas, knowledge, and experience and support your arguments with
examples and relevant evidence.)

One of the innovations of the 19th century was the making of television.
Indeed it made the world smaller. It is one of the medium in communication
for news, and entertainment. Throughout the years the television had many
improvements in presentation like that of black and white television to
colored television.

Children nowadays spend much in watching television due mainly to the
countless cartoon networks such as Cartoon Network, and Nickelodeon to
name some which majority of the children are into. But what do children
get from watching television? On the positive side, children develop their
skills in language, they learn much vocabularies in which many also put
into practice when they talk to someone especially to their families and
friends. To add, children also learn many things about the world. They
learn so many things about animals, plants, places, sports, even about
the moon and the countless stars in the night sky which children are so
fascinated with.

But despite the advantages children get from television, there are dangers
still. Many children of today watch television almost the whole day, some
do escape from classes just not to miss an episode of their favorite channel,
others become disobeying to their parents, they don’t like to help washing the
dishes and other household chores because they are so focused on what they
are watching. It is also shocking sometimes that children learn to utter obscene,
harsh, or in a simpler term bad words.

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Parents do wonder how some children come
to learn such unacceptable words for their young age. It is a big concern to
parents because what children learn at young age could be carried out when
they become adults and that is what parents are trying to avoid.

So what must parents do to control and guide the children when watching
television? These are some suggestions that may help when children are
watching television: stay with them, tell them what to watch and what
not to watch and explain why (a very simple reason is that some channels
are not appropriate for a child’s age), block the channel by setting the control
settings of a television which is now a feature of many televisions of today,
doing so, the children will not be able to access or view the channel since
it was set blocked. Although I admit that these may not still be 100% effective,
but taking action shows being a responsible parent than not doing at all.

(250+ words)

Best answer:

Answer by Sebastian
> One of the innovations of the 19th century was the making of television.

Actually, it’s the 20th century.

> Throughout the years the television had many improvements

‘The television’ would be used for a specific item, not for the medium in general. ‘Throughout the years television had…’ is better.

> in presentation like that of black and white television to colored television.

You use the word ‘television’ far too often. A suggested revise: ‘Throughoout the years television had many improvements in presentation like evolving from black and white to coloured.’

> Children nowadays spend much in watching television due mainly to the countless cartoon networks such as Cartoon Network

Way too redundant. Revise: ‘Children nowadays spend much time watching it due mainly to channels targetted to them such as Cartoon Network…’

> But what do children get from watching television? On the positive side, children develop…

Again, too redundant: you could replace the second ‘children’ by ‘they’.

> they learn much vocabularies

‘They learn many words’ is much better for that context.

> To add, children also learn many things about the world. They learn so many things about…

‘They learn many…’ is used twice. You could add some variations, for instance: ‘To add, children also learn many things about the world, animals, plants…’

> But despite the advantages children get from television, there are dangers still. Many children of today watch television almost the whole day, some do escape from classes just not to miss an episode of their favorite channel

‘Children’ is used too often, as well as ‘television’.

> Parents do wonder how some children come to learn such unacceptable words for their young age. It is a big concern to parents because what children learn at young age could be carried out when they become adults and that is what parents are trying to avoid.

The words ‘parents’, ‘children’ are ‘young age’ could be replaced the second time by pronouns or synonyms.

> So what must parents do to control and guide the children when watching television? These are some suggestions that may help when children are watching television: stay with them, tell them what to watch and what

Same case ‘children’ and ‘television’ are used often.

All in all, I’d give it a 7: good grammar and fluency, but too redundant in some places and it’s almost twice as long as it should’ve been.

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  • Country of origin: CN

Itoya of Americal, Ltd Products – Poly Envelope, for 3-Ring Binders, Side Load, 8-5/8″x11-1/2″, CL – Sold as 1 EA

Poly envelope is three-hole punched to fit inside three-ring binders. Use to turn ring binder into a durable sales presentation tools or organize and store small items. Envelope is made of a clear sturdy polypropylene material to protect documents and small items from moisture, dust and dirt. Side-loading design displays letter-size documents easily and seals with a hook-and-

List Price: $ 1.70

Price: $ 3.82

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